I wrote this poem in 2023.
"he used to be six"
Wonderful!
So good!
Skills
I like the current last line. But, out of curiosity, what was the original last line?
"Now mom is saying he has become mentally ill."
Thanks for sharing
I cried
hope you write more poetry Tao, i can see when poetry is healing
Until he dies. True for so many people, horribly.
I believe in reincarnation now, so I feel it’s not bad actually, seems fine.
Good point.
🥲
Now read it from the bottom up 👐
Good idea.
Understand how you felt and moved deeply!
The current last line was destined to become the last line.
True.
Beautiful. Very moving.
Thank you.
"he used to be six"
Wonderful!
So good!
Skills
I like the current last line. But, out of curiosity, what was the original last line?
"Now mom is saying he has become mentally ill."
Thanks for sharing
I cried
hope you write more poetry Tao, i can see when poetry is healing
Until he dies. True for so many people, horribly.
I believe in reincarnation now, so I feel it’s not bad actually, seems fine.
Good point.
🥲
Now read it from the bottom up 👐
Good idea.
Understand how you felt and moved deeply!
The current last line was destined to become the last line.
True.
Beautiful. Very moving.
Thank you.